Laying down

Alright, this is my first actual picture done in SAI... and I love the program even more. Anyways, now that I have a program that makes it really easy to do exactly what I wanted to be able to do, I have a favor to ask.

I need people to tear this picture apart. I want input on everything: anatomy (anime/manga style, no "that's not how real people look" cause I wasn't going for realism), shading and other lighting effects, along with just things to improve on overall, or anything that needs fixing that didn't cross my mind.

I really want to get better, and now that I can more accurately draw my ideas out, now seems like a great time. Unfortunately, being the one who drew it, I can't see what needs to be fixed and I would have to forget about it for about a month or more to be able to do that on my own.

So I need your help! Feel free to just comment or message me with your input. I probably won't directly respond to your comment unless I need further explanation, but I will take all of them into account. Even if you don't really consider yourself a great artist, it doesn't take a genius to tell me the eyes are located in the wrong place. Though I would prefer a link to a reference (like an anatomy drawing or stick figure) if you just say "___ is in the wrong place", it's not necessary. It'd just be easier so i can see how it's supposed to be done.

So please let me know how I can improve!